Comments : The Wick

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    ''Come to bed quick''

    I thought the flow was off in that line, which threw me a little.

    Apart from that one line however, I frikken LOVED this.
    The opening was so powerful, beautiful and intense at the same time, it really pulled me in, and after the first few lines I was completely hooked.

    The ending was beautifully written, I found it to be sweet and moving.
    Flow was good for the most part, except for the line I mentioned, I think you did a wonderful job with this.