Comments : Hypocrite

  • 17 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    Another great poem. I'm glad I read it. 5/5

    RavEy!

  • 17 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    It's funny how so many people tell us to do something yet they do it themselves, parents for example. Great write and the words were so true 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Kristina

    This was a very well written poem. i really like what it was about and all. nicely done! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 17 years ago

    by KeyxMashingxParody

    Very good, I can relate to that definately. The flow was ok, but the word work was great. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    This poem was difficult to understand because of the way you worded it.. also i didnt really understand what emotion or story this poem was trying to give off... although the structure is fine the flow wasnt really there.. i'd give it a 3/5 but i will vote a 5 anyway to keep your score at a perfect 5

  • 17 years ago

    by Georgi

    Hey babe
    I really liked the last line in the last stanza
    "something unbecoming to you. "
    that was cool. =]
    well done
    take care
    Geo
    xioxoxo

  • 17 years ago

    by me

    Like 4 real disz poem wusz really go0d nd i actually really do like ur poemsz dey have meaning nd also if i wusz u i would hang wit dat hipocrit no moree ;) (just a suggestiionn) still 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Always seeming to be looking
    for something to accuse you of
    [[I like those lines.]]

    Why would you want to do that?
    You're skinny enough already.
    [[I'm not sure why, but I also liked these lines. They stuck out to me...they had meaning; I could <feel> what you wanted me to, I guess.]]

    Don't look at me like done
    something unbecoming to you.
    [[I'm thinking you messed up this line. I liked where you were going, though, I think.
    I'd like to read it
    "Don't look at me;
    It's unbecoming on you."
    Something like that? Yeah.]]

    I didn't really like it, but I could <feel> the emotion in it, which is important. It may not be your best write, but we all have to vent.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    Uh, yeah...okay there something about it that I kinda liked but at the same time there was something working against it. I like the last stanza. The flow was a little off now and then because of some of the wording. It's actually interesting though.
    ~Faith-less

  • 17 years ago

    by Cheyanne

    I really enjoyed this poem, it kind of reminded me of my relationship with my mother.

  • 17 years ago

    by Cheyanne

    I really enjoyed this poem, it kind of reminded me of my relationship with my mother.

  • 17 years ago

    by mexima

    This was great!