I LOVE this poem. its amazing!! i love the words you used and the description is amazing! you did so well i love it. and you!! <33

In the title, I believe that you mean to say 'Emptiness' rather than 'Emtiness'...

"Until life [its self] just fades..." - itself.

Besides that, this piece was a rather pleasurable read. I actually enjoyed reading it not only because it flows quite effortlessly in tongue, but also because of the topic at hand along with its splendid imagery. Nice work, nonetheless. =] 5/5

Marian

I was move\

I was moved by this poem. It struck me because I can relate. It was very well written and the message was presented very clearly. A lovely poem. Thank you for your comment on mine, and for choosing this one for me to read, I'm glad I got the chance to read it.

Ravyn

Great job 5/5!

Great poem. The flow was ok. I really liked the wonderful word choice. I gave it a 5/5.

Until life [[its self]] just fades
It's itself, dear :]

Etching shadows but nothing real
Simply a false actuality
The fabrication a needle can give
From a high and its liberality

If you're going to use big words.
Make sure it flows well.
I'd rather read something that flows well
Than having big words.
Although, if you master both.
Then, props for you :p

But all in all,
Your vocabulary is impressive.
Something a normal person wouldn't have in their noggin :P

But then your flow wasn't too good.
So I'm going to have to give this a 4.

Darn.
Sorry.
I accidentally gave it a 5 :P

Oh yeh. i realy understand this poem that was very nicely written and nicely panned. specialy the ending wasso good. i realy appriciate for your poetry. its awesome. i loved the way you wrote it. take care

i will must give you 5/5

Amazing! this poem really moved me. i lovelovelove the last stanza. incredible.. =] great job!! 5/5

Amazing...this poem is really really great. It shows how hard any addiction, no matter what kind, is to break. I am absolutely stunned by this piece. You did an excellent job. 5/5

I can picture the whole thing and scene in my head so well..i really enjoyed reading this poem of pain..the whole flow of it and everything is really great and makes it easier to get into to..GREAT JOB!!!

definate 5/5

I thought this was most excellent and I can see exactly what you were trying to protray in this poem. Life can be so empty, and the terrible void can be filled so easily with something else, even if only temporarily. What fills it doesn't have to last or even be wonderful, it just has to be better than that feeling that is so consuming and awful. Anyway, awesome read 5/5:)

AAMMMAAAAAAAAAAAAZING!! poem like definity more than a five.. its like a 10 if there was one.. :D

The way you describe your poem in your words is just great. i love the way you write them, the flow was a little off in places but over all, nicely penned. 5/5

Love it! Great work.

By the way...

Sometimes my mind shuts down
Until life its self just fades
It slides like sand, from my grasp
Until the emptiness pervades

You probably aren't aware because you spelt it the right way in the other stanza but in the first stanza there is a typo. Its self is one word. :-) It is written with a space in between. I hate when i write typos. Just letting you know because I'm OCD for some reason today haha