I loved how this flowed.
So fast and powerful, the words were like barbs..

"she lies on her bed,screaming,
on her head,pain will be with her,
never leaving,and it goes with,
with her everywhere,like a shadow."

And an excellent ending.
Well done m'dear
5/5
*Gem*

Very well worded poem with nice feelings in it. Your metaphors are really catching and the lexical power is lucid. 5/5 piece

Great piece, with powerful imagery.
I wrote poems with similar topic, and I really like this one.
5/5