by Lenny Jun 8, 2007
category :
Life, society /
meaning of life
Menial existence |
I like the style you used in this-sort of a minilamist style, yet your words and images are very effective. A unique style and voice with a deeper meaning. Excellent piece. |
by Drew Gold
Like it. 'evolution blossoms' in that context really got me. not sure what you were trying to do, with the repeated words,.. but for me, the second time i read the words like crack and snake they were almost stale. then again reading it another time, i kind of see a connection between the repeated words .... so ... maybe its to my fault that that doesnt click first time, or maybe this is a piece meant to be read a few times over. certainly deserving th0, goodjob |