by javon evans Jun 8, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
The fire in her eyes drives through my soul like a canon ball replacing my heart with the images of her face her voice is like the runnig water that cools and sooths down my body her touch is like a electrical shock that flows through my veins to my heart and unlocks the emotion in me like ice running down my back to be with her is more than the world and without her im nothing without her the door to my freedom is locked i love her with all my heart and the heart i love is her's and the heart she loves is mine together were one. |
by Debbie
If I may suggest, perhaps breaking the lines into stanzas will enhance the fow and the piece itself as well? Nevertheless, it was a delightful read. This adorable piece simply breathes out Poetry by the use of a good number of metaphors. |