I couldn't stop reading this poem. Its breath-takingly good! I read it about three times. I only found one thing that might make it sound better.
"one day they all will go,"
To me, it would sound better if you said it
"one day they will all go,"
But thats just what I think. It's up to you how you say it. But I think it was an amazing poem!

Oooh gurl... i feel you. thats exactally how i feel about my ex best friend! great poem!