Marc,
This poem describes so much truth, that it really does make me sad. So many people die without a home, but others take it for granted. The part that you added about the news really gave a lot of power to this poem as well. The wording and how you set up this poem was wonderful, so all I can say now, it great job!
Keep it up, 5/5

Hatori

I liked this...I found it to be very sad and moving, yet very thought provoking and beautifully written all at the same time.
The imagery you painted in this piece was very nicely done, it created vivid pictures for me.
I loved the ending, it was stunning and intense and certainly makes the reader think.

Oh wow.. this piece really made me think..
You have a wonderful knack for taking a subject such as this and creating a heart wrenching poem that really hits the readers heart..
At least, you did with me.
Bravo m'dear
5/5
*Gem*

Good lesson all in all. I tried telling some people that they should be thankful for what they have. The poem itself could improve. The ending was just a bit too abrupt

WOW! I really like it 5/5

Oh my gosh ...wow...this is so so sad...the ending really shocked me...

excellent job! 5/5

Quite moving, beautifully written, astounding images painted in my mind, from reading this, it spoke to my soul, this has to be my favorite. YOur word choice was amazing, and the vocab brillant, keep it up 5/5