Demon Eye

by Simple Sensation   Jun 9, 2007


The cold stares. The cold glares.
Your eyes taunt, they haunt.
Fear grows, as the heart froze.
Qualm enters thought - it is naught.
You say you will save, but you're a knave.
Your touch makes me chill, you intent is to kill.
....
And all of a sudden, I become spry -
Free from your dark demon eye...

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9 June 2007

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  • 17 years ago

    by Reapers ZeitGeiSt

    Short and nicely arranged...a very good poem and quite dark ;) keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Well written i this one it is very dark which me like
    keep it up
    laura

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    Im just a little skeptical about the chunk "you intent is to kill.". I know you mean to say your intention is to kill. Even if you write "your intention is to kill" it would be nice with no problem in the flow. This piece is nice and the close rhymes are really catching.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Ooh wow. This was very chilling. The flow was good and I loved the rhyme scheme you used. It was very unique and looked quite difficult. The descriptions as were the rhymes. ALthoguh in some spots I did feel it was a little bit awkward but thats to be expected with that type of scheme. Other than that, great job. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Boy

    Aha. its ryming scheme was great. it was short but you showed alot of thisgs in few lines. and my friend this is called talent.
    and i have noticedthat you have great talent.
    thats why i will must give you 5/5

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