I Love this poem the only thing i would do i make it longer, you could turn this poem into a couple more stanzas. besides that i wouldnt cahnge a thing
Much love,
JUlia

I like this one to, u write really good :)

Very good!

I like this one!!,keep writing
~Izi~
@(^_^)@

Very deep n dark gd job

Hey,
nice poem, But a bit short maybe you could make it a little longer and you ended it very abrupt..but I like it, you deserve a 5.5 from me,
kisses stephanie

Dark, but i like it, not bad keep writing

Not the best of all your work but I really admire the suprise endings. Keep writing.

This poem is very good! Dying in my sleep would be nice :) I think you have a lot of talent and it shows in your writing. The rhyme scheme is excellent. The word choice itself was deadly. Keep writing!

A little freaky but I like what you write
well done
xx

I love it! I really like poems about death (i don't know why! lol) and this is one of the best.

Elaborate more. Extend your feelings...push it the limit. Your writing is good...very good...but express yourself BEYOND your own norm...go to the deepest parts of your imagination and clench the deepest darkest secrets and emotions that you can find!! This piece it good but next time dig further! Nice write!! I like very much!!!

You should make ur poems a little longer...you have a lot of emotions in it. good job

Wow, that was really good

Again
Nice work
Nice Rhyme
Nice Flow
Good Work
5/5

Keep Smiling x

Short but good
5/5
=]

I liked the theme. =] You have established a momentum at the beginning in which I especially admired. The imagery and rhythm were presented well and splendidly penned, whereas the concluding lines need to be more coherent and relevant along with the other stanzas. I'm looking forward of a revision of this piece, though.

Nice work, nonetheless. Keep on writing what you feel and like. all the best and take care.

Again another excellent piece of work...your poems are something else I love them :)