Tryna block out the threatening sound
^ Should be "Trying to" not "tryna".

but she ducks she was missed
^ I think you should use punctuation in your poetry as it would help the reader to read it the way you do. Like here for example, it needs a comma after "ducks".

Awhh, this was so saddd. Omg. And I liked how it had a kind of edgy flow to it. Like it wasn't quite smooth but it did work well. The descriptions were also good but I felt you used many common words throughout. However, your poem did keep my attention and was very exciting. Nicely done, I liked it. 5/5

Very good....it's sad and all, but very true as well. i would try not using slang like "tryna" because it can take away from the power of a poem, but other than that, this was pretty good!
Charisma*

Omg! thats a really good poem, theres a lot of emotion in it, jus as suggestions mayb set the poem out in stanzas of about four lines or wateva and use commas eg "she ducks, she was missed". other than that its a good poem..
xx

Its shows me something and reminds me of someone I lost very close to me, I know its hard, but I still keep that memory in my mind and remember that person everyday.

Omg this poem is so sad :( the start of it kind of hit home. good poem xx

Awww... that is so sad. Your rhythm was slightly off once or twice, but the overall effect of the poem is excellent. Nice job.

Beautiful poem..sad yet you've penned it well...and i can relate to this one..You've portrayed the emotions very well...but maybe the poem will certainly look better with use of punctuation..But it's good enough well written
5/5
Kp it up!

xxPoojaxx

Good poem

I love it..

I love this poem. so powerful and strikes the heart. had tears in my eyes mostly because i could relate. my father left when i was 3. but amazing poem! you are a wonderful writer. keep it up!!

-Jessyka-

Wow that is really good. good writing and rhyming keep it up!

This so sad!!! it so beautiful written! Keep up! 5/5

This is so sad, and very very very emotional. It sucks when it happens for real. I liked the way you wrote it. As i was reading it, I felt i can feel the incident in the poem. Keep up the great writing.

This poem is so sad it made me cry.

I really enjoyed this poem .......... its so sad, the tears are actually welling up in my eyes, i loved the emotion ..... and i hate the feeling that i get knowing many children suffer this or more.

nicely penned ... 5/5

Chan
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Great poem. So well written.

Begins to cry nicely done.....5/5

WoW. this poem was well written. you showed so much emotion and it was so sad. your really good, you made me wanna cry.
~FateN