WOW that was excellent , great poem filled with sad feelings,heartache and to much pain, great write, you always do great, thanks for sharing
your friend Tracy dean5/5

Wow this is fab!! your vocab is amazing i really really loved this!!!!!!! imagery and the words u use!! eeeks! Love it. i gave it a 5.
Geo

Anger fueled the fire, blazing[[,]] in my shattered heart
You don't need that there.

The [[dam]] of emotions had finally broke!
It's "damn", dear :]

I felt nothing, nothing but primordial fear
Find another synonym for "nothing".
It just sounds strange if you have two in a poem such as this.

Your hand over my mouth[[,]] muffled my screams.
No need for a comma there...

You filled me entirely with you eternal sin.
WOW! I love that.

Your ending kind of confused me.
Did she kill herself?
Or did the man kill her?

Your words were very discriptive.
They were... hypnotic, almost.
I LOVED THEM!

Your grammar was off.
Your spelling was wonderful.
Your flow was off at some points, but it was ignorable.
Not a big deal.

I did not like the fact that the girl was killed.
I don't know... I would've rather that she was alive to tell a story.

It's more believable that way.

But still.
5/5?

Wow, it was really good

Truely superb dear. Your descriptions are outstanding and you have just selected the best lexis. Great 5/5 worth piece. tc

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what a talent. this piece blew my f**ken
mind. I would kill to be able to write like you wowwwwwwwwwwww
cy

OH.. that was so emotional.. It brought tears to my eyes.. Very well written.. the best part is..

"My smile faded before it reached, my pale blue eyes,
I was only fifteen, and corrupted by all of the lies.
Innocence withered like a dying rose in the sand
As you came along and took my my trusting hand."
Please dont stop writing.. your an awesome poet..

I am at a loss for words to describe how well your words, and imagery, took me to the scene of a tragedy that should have not happened. You are indeed a skillful writer. 5/5>>>

Wow that was so intense.. Truly GREAT. No other way to describe it. You are a great writer, all your poems are amazing..

Ooh nice one 5/5

I love the intensity in this poem, it brought out me reminiscing of all the hateful lies I was told, everything cruel that brought me to where I was today.

5/5

My favorite line, it sent chills down my spine:
Anger fueled the fire, blazing, in my shattered heart

Oh my goodness. This is amazing. I do not know how you manage to do it, but you do it. And you do it well. This is great piece. 5/5. I would give you 10/5 if it were possible. lol

That is a really good poem.. but very sad

Wow, that was very good. flowed very well. People don't understand the struggle for rape victims. Emotional, Physical, Mental, everything.. You portrayed it well. 5/5 Great job.