by Krazy
The first one you quoted is describing how she can feel him, but only in her mind because he was no where near, that door was shut a long time ago. |
by Melpomene
Some of your lines throughout this piece were truely amazing. Very powerful and written in such great depth.I love how you put so much into your poems. It makes the emotion really strong. ~mel |
Wow this was so sad I loved how you described everything that you were feeling but you also used the metaphores of the door. Each word of this poem spoke to me in a way that hasn`t happened in a long time. it was all so magical but I think that the ending would have to be my favorite part, because when you`ve lost someone you care about thats exactally how it feels. The only thing that I can critique on is to make sure that you capitalioze your I`s I know its just a little thing but it really takes away from your writing ability those things. Nice work over all though. |