Nice poem,really like it, im quite like that aswell....

Hello.

Well. To the critique.

You must work with better flow.
There was not enough information so the reader can INTERPRET your point of view.

I hope that makes sence.

It is not a Good poem. Nor excellent.

But it isnt poor neither. And its Far BETTER than poor. But not good...

I have to settle with "Fair".

PLease improve your writing. You should get a dictionary. Thesauraus. And learn new words and improve your writing Power.

I shall look for more of your future poems. You shall hear from me again.

Always,
[Deathly'Amore]