Such a moving poem. The imagery was great. A lot of emotion. Overall a great write. Great job!!

Omg that was short but so deep! =[ i nearly cried! [but done nuff of that today] wow! i loved the description it was so interesting and fun to read, so sad and painful! i cant find the words! lovely poem!
nuff luv xx
sorry for the late comment...i had exams, got held up =] xx

Awww. This poem makes me want to read more about this troubled girl. What she's feeling, what she's thinking, what she's doing to save herself or to get rid of herself. It's a good thing to leave a reader intrigued wanting more by the way =P I liked in some places it flowed. In others, it didn't, but I'm sure you could probably work on that a little. The emotion was there as well. Just not as much as the great description you gave this girl. I was literally picturing she was right in front of me lol. Try to put emotion as well as description into your poems. They'll come out terrific. This poem only seems to have description with a little bit of emotion. Try to balance it out a little more. But still, great write. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Aww thats a very good poem i could actually see the bridge and the girl walking across it very powerful piece!

Pretty good poem. I like the imagery and it had such large amount of sadness. The poor little girl. There were a few parts where i had to reread the line in order to help it flow, but other than that great job!

Omgosh!!! This poem is amazing..so enjoyable to read...u r so talented..the whole poem was so emtional..

Beautfiful...hats off to you.. gr8 piece of wrk.. one o ma favz... srsly... gr8 way to express...

Excellent!

your turn your ideas into a real art!, good concept and great words..

keep it up!

I thought at the beginning of the poem it was great, and the detail of the little girl was very good, but towards the end the structure of the poem wasnt very good, i mean the rhyming was good, but then at a part it seemed that you changed the rhyming pattern, but all in all a good poem
5/5

This was heartbreaking...I loved the depth and emotion you put into this, they were very clear for the reader to see.
I loved the ending..elegantly written.

Awesome, good stuff there!

I think that this is going to wind up being my favorite poem of your's.The visualization in this poem was great.I could actually imagine a young girl walking all by herself with her thoughts spinning because she feels so a lone.This was a truly amazing poem.It was very original.Again you're flow was slightly off but nothing that really made a difference because you're describtions made up for the flow.It was sorta kinda like a short story.It does need some slight touching up done though but I was really touched by this poem because I've always felt like that little girl.Anyways,I give you a 5/5

</3Amber

Loved the imagery, especially in the beginning of the poem.
You can really feel the sadness here of the girl because of the thought out words you used.
Good write.

5/5

xo angelique

Omg wow!!! this is another awesome and really moving piece of work from you...it's like i can really see this poor little girl wandering alone right in front of me...soo sad!!!!
great stuff!!!!!
5/5
- ali xxxx

Awwz that is rele sad but very good written!