Wow nicely writen, looking forward to reading more of your thoughts relateing to sadness ------------- doomed till death dungeonbat

I like the concept of the poem, but i think you have to work on it a little more. Like grammer usage, and Vocabulary. In poetry, the words that are written must have some emotion in them. Not just a whole bunch of rhyming words put together. Thank you for commenting my poem. I respect your opinion and i will work on it. But by the way...Good job =)