by broken angel
For some reason, I just really liked this poem. I can't exactly tell you why, it's just...so...original. I've never read anything like it, but it was still really good. I think I can kinda pick up on your message, so if it's what I think it is, you did a GREAT job. 5/5 in my book! |
by Jessica
"She hikes her skirt up; giving those boys what they crave, |
by S0u10fS0rr0w
This took alot to comprehend since my mind has been strecthed today from work but i found it a good explicit poem, you really can write them good huh, lol. flow was good so i give it a 5/5!!! keep them coming!!! |
by Mommy And Me
Okay well dear. i believe that this is an awsome poem. i love it sooo much it is freat. and shows alot of feeling in it. good work dear. i liked how you put your words. any other way would kill the poem. good work . lol :P |
Wow, nice story. I think the title was a great choice, and repeating the first stanza was a great way to make the poem feel circular. I love the rhyming, and the part about "Daddy's credit cards". Good poem. |
by .K.i.T.t.Y.
First of all, i like your poem style. |
Howeee Smack! I love the style of this and the message was sad but true. I work right in the middle of a bad part of town and one of the girls I went to school with whom was quite popular is now still quite popular walking front street and her life is nothing but thugs and drugs. Her teeth rotted from the meth. It is so sad the truth you have in this write. Awesome Job, |