Suicide

by Brittini   Jun 12, 2007


Throughout the ages, life's been rough
But for teens, it's just too tough
Thinking you found love, when it's only hate
Trying to fix it, when it's way to late
Feeling like, you only bring people pain
Feeling like, you're the only one to blame
The depression grows, and gets to strong
And suicide's been in your mind, to long
Then seeing the hurt, in friends eyes
Only opinion, feels like suicide
I try showing you that I care
And that I'll always be there
But your mind is already made
And from this life, you wish to fade
Fade out of memories and out of life
You take one last look at the knife

... *** ...

Maybe if you heard what I wanted to say
Maybe it wouldn't have ended that way
For the next month all I did was cry
And ask why you committed suicide

Now couple years have gone and past
But your memory in me will always last

Please comment because this poem means a lot to me and I want to see how most people like it also please tell me how I can improve my poems thanks<3

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  • 17 years ago

    by Cassandra

    Great Poem and Beautiful ending. Its very touching and deep {it even made me cry} No-one can truly understand what some-one else is going {or went} through unless they've experienced it themselves and you did a wonderful job of bringing fourth the message behind this poem! 5/5!

  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    Well i thought it was a really great
    poem exept for the fact you
    ended to different lines
    with the word "suicide" and
    i think that makes your strucure
    a little messy

    but i liked it alot
    its flowed well and the rhyming
    was great
    it never seemed forced, 5/5 welldeserved

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    Dear I am very sure that this is a true piece. I read every line with my heart and i found sheer love and grief in this piece. Your wordings and rhymes are beautiful and you got 5/5 from me.

    With love
    Fsams

  • 17 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Wow this poem relates to me soo much..cuz i felt the same way...its a very good poem and maybe you should make it a lil longer and put more emotion in it...

  • 17 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    This poem was a biut cliche' for me and i dont enjoy this style much anyway so perhaps it would be unfair to vote on this?

    hmmm.

    if you want me to vote PM me.

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