by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG Jun 12, 2007
category :
Life, society /
patriotism
He picks up that old bag; holding my pale hand, |
I think the story was very nice, very heartfelt and sad. You used excellent rhyming, and it didn't sound forced at all. The flow was very nice, and the small piece of dialogue really made the story and the poem. |
by Bryan
Tis another great poem jenna, love the flow, the story is excellent, i give it a 5/5 as always!!! |