A very powerful piece David. The emotion; pain and sadness especially is very strongly expressed in this. I could feel it when I was reading it. The flow was great and the rhyming didn't sound forced. I loved how you described "sharp words of hatred". When I read that it really stood out to me. A really good poem you have here. Well done. 5/5

Tammie

It was so dark and haunting..I loved the expressions here and there and they made the poem powerful and so mysterious
My fave lines should be;

Who is to stop me?
My inevitable struggle to survive
My hard times with sharp words of hatred
My life to continue is all I strive

Keep it up
Cheer up david
We love you :]]
Take care,
Laura

I loved this piece. its so beautiful and inspiring yet sad and painful... 5/5 this one touched me, just like the rest of your poems. be happy =)

~NinjaGirl~

Hey David. This poem is full of pain and sadness. If you have pain you should release it. If you keep bottling it up it will do more damage when you finally do release it.

Anyway, a wonderfully written poem. 5/5
Keep up the wonderful work
Cheer up.

Kalee

I can feel your pain and sadness in every word you write ,and I understand your feelings well.This is a very well written piece ,my thoughts are with you and I hope soon you will find happiness and peace.take care.

This is really good david.

No, I have learned that I should
Hold my pain in myself and deal
Bite my lip and force myself not to cry
In time, somehow I will heal

if this is how you really feel, there is way to not feel this way. dont hold all the pain inside till you break i was there once. i held all the pain inside of me till i could burst like a bubble and all it did was make me become a bad person. it was scary. if u need to talk im here and u know it!! smile.
amanda

This was really amazing, the emotion and flow of this poem were so powerful that it just was breathtaking!
i loved the title as well, 5/5
gabriella

This was really good. i loved it but it sucks that you feel that way.

Once again David, you have written another great poem. The word choice was excellent, the flow was good, the emtion was strong, well penned, I really liked this I am glad I got to read it for my first poem of the day. Only mistake I found dam should be damn other than that this is absoultly perfect. 5/5

David
This piece is really full of sadness.

Cruel and ruthless
Dangerously close to letting go
If only I could say how much I hurt
If only I could make you know...

The words are crying out for help. Great Job!
Take Care Cindy

David,
this piece is so incredibly brillant!
The word choice was excellent!
The flow was superb!
But also, this poem was very sad...
I could feel the tears welling up in my eyes.
Dam should be damn but that's beside the point.
Once again David you have written an amazing piece I love it so very much!
5/5 like always
kaila

Wow David. That poem is absouletly amazing. It's depth and flow are superb. You really must have been having a bad day, but it goes deeper than that. I can't quite put my finger on it, but it's there. This is definetly a 5/5. Hope you feel better

Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

It's a 5/5 for you too, son!

Awesome flow there and excellent wording. im adoring it :P

My own epic duel

^ cant get enuf of that line.. very well done keep it up

A very powerful piece David. The emotion; pain and sadness especially is very strongly expressed in this. I could feel it when I was reading it

Another I love, I can relate too well. And I jsut love when I can relate to things like this, poems like this.
I love the ending. I will save you, if possible.

Gosh, this was really one of the best sad poem i ever read, you have put a kind of emotion in it that i believe no one can hold tears reading it. if only taht person know how much you care about her, cause reading this i know you are a true lover and you really care that is why you are hurt....
again, one of the best work...
keep it up

You seem very popular when it comes to your peoms and so im sure i have repeating the same points others have made but i want to show my love for this poem and my support for it.

my favourite stanza was:

Cruel and ruthless
Dangerously close to letting go
If only I could say how much I hurt
If only I could make you know...

This poem had such a ferosity and such a burning fire within it. It seems like you testing yourself, testing the devil itself also. I love the contrast bewteen pain, loss and grievance. The poem seemed to be tiring (in a good way), it added to the drama and emotion of it all. It has this slogan attached to it "whats the point of living if you cant feel alive" .... i really enjoyed this, well penned. keep up the great work.

-xx-
Chan

Hey david!..i know this is probably an dold poem but ive only just signed in on this site thing...but your poem has so muc depth to it that i wsa i could touch..your powerful words made my stomach tight just wishin i knew how you felt...though i am one of those rape victims i must say your poem is good...

keep it up bree...PS..PLEASE READ ND COMMETN ON MY POEMS REALLY APPRECIATE IT!..CHEERS

Hi david,
Does this poem have anything to do about mat, especially when u told me the other day that u had taught yourself to hold it in. I love it i felt the same way after Ryan and Rob passed away. Sorry if have got it wrong but that's how it looks to me ok
This is my favourite bit(probally because it relates to me the most):
No, I have learned that I should
Hold my pain in myself and deal
Bite my lip and force myself not to cry
In time, somehow I will heal

I love it. I want you to write more because when i read your poems i am in your world not mine.

Talk soon ;)