Well done Laura, I like the story you told in this poem. You described the setting very well and it was lucid enough to were I can picture it clearly. The title went with the poem and was well chosen. You had a good flow mixed into the story which is very important in any poem. You ended the last stanza off very well leaving it un finished as if the story is not over yet. It was well written & nicely organized; I hope to see more of your work soon.

Peace, Poetry & Power,

Nick

Excellent poem. feel the sadness in it, great flow, vocabulary was wonderful and you placed it very well as usual, great job my friend , keep it up,,,,, your friend Tracy dean, 5/5

Wonderful job asweets. the story in the poem is great the words all fit right and i agree with nick about leaving the poem unfinished because the stoy is not done
great job 5's for you deary

This poem was sad oh so sad but it was well write...your talented...5/5

Oh dear,
this was another great write by you. after reading a poem by you, you become more special to me.lol.
great job as always dear.5/5

Very well write i must say, but i think that some of the rhymes seemed forced like you couldnt find something else so you just "had to do" with the one you had. but other than that, the flow was very nice and the poem itself had a nice strong meaning :]

Now this, has, to be the best poem i have read so far today. well done. this was awesome. everything bout it was excellent. the topic was unique too.

5/5 David

Nice job Laura. It was well written and I liked the use of 'rain' being unpredictable in one's life. A very sad poem which was heartfelt.
cheers, josh

It was interesting. I really liked it. The word choice was strong and the flow was very nice. I also liked the format you wrote this poem in. I gave it a 5/5.

"Seasons in the sun" this reminded me of the beautiful song, it says goodbye to you my trusted friend....

Thats just one part, well Laura this is having its own unique style and your consecutive rhymes are very beautiful. Max ratings dear.

With love
Fsams

Wow. it was awesome. the structure of it was great. the flow was good and it just all went together. it was so true and meaningful.

But money is a thing that can be easily devoured,
And it has nothing to do with your health.

it is so true, most people think this way. well overall i loved it. 5/5

Aww, this was sad a sad read. I like how you told a story, from the beginning to the end. I noticed, however, that you had a few mistakes, or some things which I feel would be read better if changed:

"While walking at one of [the] London's empty streets." - 'The' is not needed.

"Finally understood it when I found myself gazing [at]
The rain outside on one of the hospital's window"
^ I think this would work better if you put 'at' at the end of the first line, and do without the comma.

Yet I won't be able to see any other[s]" - Change 'other' to 'others'.

"[I] Then learned I fainted because I [had] that brain tumor" - You should put 'I' at the start here, and changed 'have' to 'had', otherwise you would be using two different tenses here, since you already used the past tense with 'fainted'.

"There was no one left now even to tell me a bloomer" - Change 'were' to 'was'.

Overall, it was very sad and well written, despite those [small] mistakes. :)

Beautifully penned! Well done! That was simply amazing Laura! Great Vocab, excellent choice of words!

I like the opening stanza! :) It really painted a picture in my mind, good job!

5/5!

This is so heartbreaking and at the same time so beautifully written.
I like the rhyme scheme you used, and the imagery you used was beautifully done, it created very vivid pictures for me.
I love the ending, it was so stunning intense and hardhitting at the same time.

Strong poem, there laura. People usually do waste there days, so this peom applies to many people; and, can enrich many peoples lives. Well done.

~Richi~

Deep and touching piece, wonderfully written.
The wording is great.
Every stanza is sad and beautiful at the same time.
5/5

Wow, this is really well written

WOW that was so sad made me frown and i have watery eyes I LOVE THE SUN I CANT IMAGINE LIFE WITHOUT IT
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH