Comments : I hate everything...But you.

  • 17 years ago

    by Lover Boii

    Hate is a strong word and you use it well. Maybe too well.

  • 17 years ago

    by Hatori

    Karissa,
    I felt that this poem had a lot of meaning in it, and you showed a lot of feeling as well, but I would change a couple things. Something that would help this poem is if you put it into stanzas. I think that if you did that, there would be more of a structure. Also, some lines seemed awkward. When I say that, I mean that if you made the lines the same length, then there would be more flow.
    There was a particular line that really caught my attention. This one:

    And I hate fighting back every tear.

    There was so much emotion that it really brought this poem together. Other than that, I wouldn't change anything.
    Keep it up, and thanks for the RRC's :D

    With all due respect,
    Hatori