Envious Suicide

Hmmm....kool. thanks for the comment & im not with him anymore,& havent been for like 3 months. keep up the good work!

Re-read it just for reassurance, and the flow wasn't half as bad I said. And, I was way too harsh for the skill I saw in it the second time. Very good poem, indeed I over-reacted. That was how I felt honestly with my first comment, and all authors deserve honest opinions.

Uhmm, can I say that the ending was more filling than the parts before? The flow of the poem was as if a robot was talking to me. To me it was like a mediocere rap song with a catchy hook. Maybe I'm not giving you enough credit, it is 9:24am here and I haven't been to bed so excuse me if I was too harsh. It was a good poem, but the rhythm made me want to drown. Try to play around with a beat in the word play, and it will come out much better. Honestly, I was too distracted to notice the words.

Wow.. just wow... i can actually imagine your poem its really great. i love it alot.. well obviously hah. greattt job

5/5

Beautiful... Great words. I'm impressed. 4/5