This poem is filled with emotions and the story you told in the poem is fascinating. The flow was nice with the occasional rhyme that I found. The flow runs along the lines and keeps up with it without slowing down or stopping. The organization was good, the original four line stanza which I’ve come to know very well. Once again you show great emotion in this piece of work and I think it was excellent. Keep on writing and always think of the future and not of the past.

Peace, Poetry & Power,

Nick

It was a nice poem which flowed very well. There were just a couple of lines that perhaps could've been shorter but other than that it was great. I like the way that you incorporated things that hold memories and your title fit in well.
cheers, josh

Hey this is a great poem really nice :D i love it ,you could actually picture it in you maind, i give you 5\5 :D , i just started to do peoms maybe you could give me tips ,, when you have time come and see then....

This is a really good poem - as Josh said, some lines could have been a bit shorter so it flowed easier, but very powerful. :) Thanks for a good read.

Mo
xx

Good expression,
powerful words.
I loved it,
it was truly a good story,
in poetry forum.
Good job, Grace.
5/5
-Heather