Well the concept was there and the word usage was good. You let your emotions show through your words which is needed. The things you'll need to fix would be your grammar which includes the spelling as well as the tenses.
eg. In the second verse you wrote that you didn't even say 'good buy.' That should be spelt 'goodbye.' Besides your grammar, everything was pretty good. Just keep working at it.
cheers, josh

I liked the sadness and powerful words in this poem...But so let's go into the editing and let me help you make it flawless

First hun;
She gone=she is gone

She is never coming back,:She will never come back

din't=didn't

I wish I kiss you:I wish I kissed you
I wish I hug you=I wish I hugged you

Is it a personal experience?I hope not....
But I'm always there to listen

Take care gama,
Laura

Hmm..this was something different, very sad and emotional, nice flow, only grammer to improve other a great poem.5/5
mezmeryz x

That was beautiful Gama ^_^ I think we all need to be reminded to tell the people we care about just how much they mean to us =P I really liked this ~_~ 5/5
Rhea

P.S. I'm sorry that it's taken me so long to comment on your two new ones =P I've been kinda out of things lols

I like it...

Thats really nice...What a great love you have for ur mother ! MashAllah
Love her forever just like this poem !
5/5
Biya

God always wants to remind us that we should always take care and cherish those treasures that were given to us... Lovely piece!!! god bless you!!!

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