Nice twist in the end...in the beginning it seems like you're going to lose him, but then...you don't...i liked this...
(boring note about ortography that i have to include 'cause i'm boring =D : in "i'm dead, to" you write it with two "o"', like "too")
this was really a nice dark poem...
(i <3 dark poems...:D)
5/5
*isabel*

Great poem. It has an emotion that flows through it. I really enjoyed this poem alot. 5/5 .... Keep writting from the heart.

Chan
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I really enjoyed this read. very original style and creative theme for your write!

Very original though at the end it fades away, but i love your DARK style. keep it don't stop writing.=) take care