Beutifully written, yuo made it longer, which i love, you got your emotion out which is deep and heartfelt, i'm guessing this is about an ex girlfriend, heartbreak is head to go through and i am glad you got your emotion out through words.
good luck with contest,
Jade

Another great poem. I liked it.

Kelsie

Wow. this is great.
good job.
youre amazing at writing.
<3jess

Hmm, i've read this poem like 6 times.
i could have sworn i already commented.
ah well, this was an amazing poem love. it was very capturative and quite intriguing. i wouldn't change a thing :) 5/5