I absolutely love this poem. I wrote something like this a long time ago, titled "Lord, Please Make Me Cry"...but yours is better. ;p I love the emotion felt in this poem. A truly amazing write. Never stop. 5/5

` Liz =]

This poem was so sad.
i can relate to it very well.

Not a single soul is trusted
And I hold a fatal secret
Promising I would keep it
So to fulfill my pleasures
And not upset her in this measure
Couldn't change for even one...
Oh, I hate what I've become

i just loved this stanza it had a lot of meaning.
best wishes
and take care
emmeline

Wow.
this is yet another lovely poem mate.
But i knew it would be great before i even read it, because you wrote it.
and you're just a totally brilliant writer.
5/5 love.

This is heart-rending, so so sad. I love the reapeat of "Oh, I hate what I've become", it was quite effective. The first stanza was my favorite, very powerful! Really moving poem!

Simply wonderfull!

I really enjoyed reading this one....and re-reading this again.....thought provoking and deep.....

Couldn't change for even one...
Oh, I hate what I've become

Tired of the sunset, I say
Give me a sunrise. Let's get away.

^the ending lines are awesome! Take care, Debbie

Wow this poem truly touched me
.x

Hey ....i actually dont like this poem much...i think its because i dont see the perspective of which you wrote it....in other words i dont understand it....um i found it hard to find a ryhming pattern....

Thats wut i felt at some times
i really liked it

Filled with such sad emotion.... but never change for anyone unless its for yourself. We all at times hate what we've become and thats when we make those changes in ourselves.... wonderful write

Great job i absolutely love it....i could feel all of the emotions that were being expressed......great write

Okay,
God sent me to become your sunrise of the day. But if you don't smile at this wonderful sunrise (that is me) that has come your way, nothing will work! So you better smile at me right now...ha ha...you know your life is lovely, cause you've got me....!

Its funny how we can be friends when we have such different likings, dont we....I fall for girls, you fall for guys, you hate yourself, I love that same self of yours, ha ha....COME ON SARAH DOLL! Just for today, smile for me. Come on, you dont get sunrises like me every day!

When I have often been low, I have prayed to god, with nothing left with me except for hope that someone might help...and minutes later, my dad knocks on my locked door, coming from work in an exceptionally good mood....or a friend of mine suddenly remembers me and calls me...but I make the mistake of not seeing them as God sending help, and continue to cry....

YOU LEARN FROM ME, YOU BETTER LEARN FROM ME! haha....I've come your way cause I love ya, and today you shall smile and have fun.

You are wonderful. Go to the mirror right now, crack up that doll smile that makes my day, and say it five times to yourself. YOU ARE WONDERFUL! See me as a miracle thats come your way, dammit! haha...

I saw this movie, dead poets society. I learnt something very important. We must seize the day. Carpe Diem. Very cliched and inspirationally phrazy, but its so true isnt it?

All we have to do is forget everything around us. Just BREAK FREE from the shackles of our misery....leave it behind for TODAY! Just for today, live THIS day....only once, and do the things you LOVE. Treat yourself.

By the way, life is very pretty if you think about it. Just draw up a gratitude list- the lovely things in your life, and you'll know.

So today, Sarah, I challenge you to live this day to the fullest. Let those last three words sink in, taste them and let your tongue drip with them. To the fullest. To the fullest. Do you accept? *Scream YES I DO!* :D
Love ya.....