This poem was quite interesting. The emotion you portrayed was really good. The structure seemed a little odd to me I liked how there was 5 stanzas of 4 lines but some lines seemed shorter then others and others seemed longer which in some places through the flow off. Other then that I did enjoy reading this. Well done~mel

Tnx mel for the comment..well, im not really good in haiku or doing things in measure..if i just feel right to write a poem i wrote it..tnx again ;)