I liked the word choice you used throughout this poem I belived it was strong powerful and held greatly sad emotions. The flow was good which held this poem together. The structure was a little different because of the stanzas being different sizes. To me the only lines that through this poem off a little was Sometimes they fell weak,
Sometimes she fell weak,
The words seemed used too much over again in these two lines. Other then that this is an interesting read. Well done~mel