by Melpomene
In the title I think this poem would be better if you changed the slang 2 to the real word. Other then that I liked the emotion which was portrayed I think you put it in well with depth and made this a touching poem. Well done. Good effort~mel |
by Hatori
Very good topic, I truly can say! You might want to break this poem up into stanzas, but that`s your choice. The line I liked the most was: |
Same here. This poem is really beautiful, because I used to be happy girl all the times. And now whats happening to me? ive changed but i rather go back to be happy girl. Now, im in the darkness for now. Yeah it sucks but we will have to work to change ourselves back to normal happy girls again. Believe me. I'm trying to be happy inside and outside because i just cant take it anymore to be sad. SAD! SAD! SAD! sorry but i hate to be sad just like you. life goes on but we gotta change ourselves to go back to normal again. Live, love, laugh |
by geeeeee
"Now, I live in sorrow |
by Broken Saint
Great poem (n_n) |