Saddened Your Soul [Acrostic]

by Tricky Daze   Jun 15, 2007


Sober smiles and fascinating looks;
All finished with my paranoia.
Delightful lies began so proud,
During the time truths were hid.
Embed feelings were forever buried;
Never to be opened ever again.
End will be so sad but now sweetie,
Dance with me until forever as it's my bid.

Yet so little time for us to stay,
On this sophisticated night with so much to
Undo for valuable seconds to see you
Rewinding all your tears and let moon to be ours.

Seeing you as a friend wasn't enough so many times;
Or I can't take this without calling you as my beau.
Upon my eyes will say what you should do thru:
'Leap me into your strong arms and growl'

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Special Thanks to my hero on this poem:Michael D. Nalley..I'm thankful for him

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  • 17 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    Wow quite deep and I REALLY LOVE YOUR POETRY 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Great poem.
    Flow; flawless
    Rhyming; excellent
    Writting; Very well done

    I also loved how in the 2nd stanza the lines flowed into the next. Very effective. 5/5

    -Shannon <3

  • 17 years ago

    by Adelle

    I like this poem however I have read better from you this is only my opinion but I dident feel this poem flowed very well also it would be good if you split this into four 4 line stanzas.

  • 17 years ago

    by tears i cry

    Probably the best acrostic i have read in my 15 years of life my 4 favorite lines were:
    Sober smiles and fascinating looks- cute and fun
    Delightful lies began so proud- thats the way lies often betray us
    Dance with me until forever as it's my bid- sweet and sensitive yet a bold statement
    Rewinding all your tears and let moon to be ours- one again a very cute and bold line and yet still some what beautiful

    personally i loved it another piece worth 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by XXTruthSeekerXX

    I love the simple acrostic style. There's not much to say but keep up the good work. You're a great romantic poet.

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