The why's and everything got in the way of the feeling that this poem was suppose to give it was to repetitive. if you replaced those words this poem would bump up to a new level
3/5
kaila

You had a pattern going on using the words why & when, and the last two lines you abandoned it. Other than that, I really liked this poem. One of your best. 5/5

This is such a strong piece. The use of the rhetorical questions was such a good idea. Very clever. Keep it up. Nik