I really liked this poem your right it doesnt make much sense but yet it kinda does great job most the time what doesnt seem to make much sense makes more sense then what should make sense
carly

BlankIllusion is so right. and that wise man is Jim Morrison,Leadsinger for the doors. He is my faverite poet/writer/singer. I thought i was the only one that quoted him. but any way yes it was GREAT. it sounded like someone descriping an acide trip i soppose thats y u choose the name. Well 5/5

I loved this! Everything screamed at me and said READ MEEEEE!!!!!

The theme was great - Alice in Wonderland is mega-awesome (In fact, I'm planning on getting a half-sleeve tattoo with an alice in wonderland theme).

The idea behind the poem seemed to be well thought out, and although you say it didn't make sense, it did. I know this, because I, too, write in this manner.

My favorite line was:

"The only heart that lies here
lies only with the liars."

I love assonance, and alliteration.

Superb, dear, very superb!

This is great it's like nothing i have ever read before. I admire the difference. Awesome job keep it up Shanik

Wow. i loved it. it makes perfect sense to me. i completely agree with BlankIllusion though. i loved it. absolutely amazing. great job.
5/5

and thanx for the comment on my poem. and it is kinda meant to be a song. i should probably put that on it somewhere. lol.

yours always,
oxoxLIKETHEWINDxoxo