Wonderful poem, it shows great emotion in the telling of the story about a young girl and all the hardships she goes through. First off you created an excellent flow which was carried from beginning to end and kept its durability. The rhyme was a big part in creating the flow, you used the right words to let it rhyme and still sound go and stay along with the general theme of the poem. The ending was especially good and it ended off the poem quite well. Keep up the good work Lauren.

Peace, Poetry & Power,

Nick

A generally good poem. i think it was an unusual idea and a very well portrayed one. the majority of the poem was well worded and rhymed well.

however i felt that some parts the rhyme was forced and rhymed for the sake of rhyming, eg

She is divine, just like her name
She should shine, her lights in fame

that didn't really make sense to me. other than that well written. 4/5

Omg. thats really good. i love the rhythem to it. 5/5. this is beautiful. u did wonderful considering you haven't written in a month.

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