by Kristin Jun 16, 2007
category :
Life, society /
about society
Wrinkle free clothing |
The flow seems choppy and the rhymes seem forced. Like the content but it's just...the flow really throws it off for me. I like the beginning cuz it had a cool hook but it's just the flow problem where it unraveled for me. I'm not sure but it just seems the last stanza fails with the flow and all. Probably just because I'm picky with the words. |