by Skye x0x0x
This isnt that bad.. it sounds like a story but it sounds like it is happening the momment you read it so yer it is great.. is this sort of where you inspiration comes from?? like your name.. and stuff |
This is amazing..i really love it.....i admire the way u right...almost like story-telling...its like i can see it all happening right before my eyes....great job keep up the good work |
by deathdealer
Break it up into stanzas, otherwise it will sound like a blog entry or a story |
by Robert
I was not sure how to react to this poem it had some wonderful images in it and I found myself wanting to take in all, but I can't place my finger on it except to say something was missing and I don't know what Plot121 |
by Soraya Lowe
Ooo! I like! I like very much! Very pretty! Very interesting...5/5 Great job! |
Greatly written dark poem, with haunting imagery. |
by Nix
Wow this poem is fantastic, you created amazing atmosphere. It is very dark and the end is effective. I like th wording the most. |