Comments : Untitled

  • 17 years ago

    by Skye x0x0x

    This isnt that bad.. it sounds like a story but it sounds like it is happening the momment you read it so yer it is great.. is this sort of where you inspiration comes from?? like your name.. and stuff

  • 17 years ago

    by all because of him

    This is amazing..i really love it.....i admire the way u right...almost like story-telling...its like i can see it all happening right before my eyes....great job keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by deathdealer

    Break it up into stanzas, otherwise it will sound like a blog entry or a story

    but its good though =)

  • 17 years ago

    by Robert

    I was not sure how to react to this poem it had some wonderful images in it and I found myself wanting to take in all, but I can't place my finger on it except to say something was missing and I don't know what Plot121

  • 17 years ago

    by Soraya Lowe

    Ooo! I like! I like very much! Very pretty! Very interesting...5/5 Great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Greatly written dark poem, with haunting imagery.
    I think you should write it in stanzas, it would leave better impression, but the poem is good, anyway.
    Well done, 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow this poem is fantastic, you created amazing atmosphere. It is very dark and the end is effective. I like th wording the most.
    Running, hiding, from a darkness that haunts her. Fantasy overtakes her mind,- this is my favorite line.
    Superb poem with excellent imagery, 5/5