Thats a good poem i like it nd relate to it too xxx

Wow that was difforent a good difforent though....i like short peaces so yess...

lime green shadow on the wall

Beautifully written, only thing that I can see that can be approved is take out the shortcuts like cuz they throw the flow off sometimes, and it looks unprofessional, you should spell the word out to show that you took time to write this. other than that the flow was good, the emotion was excellent and the word choice was simple yet effective 5/5

Very good, Fsams :). Some lovely imagery and powerful language throughout this piece; all in all, a well penned poem with good use of poetic tools. However, there is slight room for improvement, minor alterations that may make this piece sound a lot more effective. Firstly, you could do by including the proper punctuation. Sometimes leaving a piece with no indication of direction can confuse the reader. So, if you are editing this piece, remember to throw in the correct punctuation, such as commas, full stops or even the semi colon. Secondly, it is a great shame that you used the term 'coz' as opposed to the complete 'because'. I was reading it with so much empathy until that word came up and broke up the flow. I'd suggest changing it to 'because'. And finally, I would alter the last line from: "And till death I can't forget your name" - to - "And till death, I'll cherish your name". I don't know, it seems a lot more effective and meaningful to me. But it is up to you :).

Like I said; a poetically successful piece. Well done :)

This was an good poem, abit too short but nice the images were good but I think If you gave a couple more exsamples of why you thought you were alone and how you got that way the poem would be alot more powerful Plot121

Short and sweet. I enjoyed the beautiful wordings in it. GOD BLESS YOU

Fsams this piece is short and sweet. Keep up the good work.

"I wish I could feel the smell again."
Either this is a mistake, or it's a brilliant piece of poetry. Either way I love it.
Take care,
Parker

I liked this poem especially the first stanza...very creative and the wording was great a 5/5

Once again a well earned 5/5! Such strong and powerful words!
Keep up the poems coming.
.x

This was a great poem quite beautiful with such amazing imagery portrayed throughout the entire piece. I loved the flow it was remarkable I couldnt find a flaw throughout the entire thing. Short and sweet. Creative and interesting all in one. My favorite stanza was the first it was very strong. Well done with this~mel

I always liked your advance vocabulary and i think that was the best that you used
My fave lines should be;

I wish I could feel the smell again
Because I still love you the same
You are still the cure for all my pain
And till death, I'll cherish your name

Beatifully penned,
Laura

Short but passionate... 5/5 of course m'dear.

Your best yet, as far as my opinion goes. i say this because not only is this poem beautiful within it self but it also really home hard for me. each night i feel exactally what you describe in this poem. great job. truly. another 5/5

Love it.. <3

Oh, man, Fsams. This is beautiful. /Definately/ your best by far. I could feel the emotion emitting from it, I could see your whispering this to your lover... Beautiful.
I really enjoyed reading this. The wording is perfect. Nicely done.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

First stanza is my favorite one. It is interesting, short but very original and powerful. I like the atmosphere of this piece. 5/5

Aw this is beautiful..its just so amazing...full of emotion... it flowed nicely...i dont know what to say...

except for great job! 5/5 from me.

I loved this one! (you don't need to comment any more of mine unless you want to, this title caught my interest) I thought it was very well written and was well expressed for how short it was.

I liked the simplicity of this poem. You got right to the point, and told a story without any fancy vocabulary. Something about the last stanza struck me as odd, I think it may be that "same" and "pain" sound similar... but other than that, really nice poem.