Wow, this was an amazing poem i must say.
it was very into depth as well as intriguing and capturative. there's only one thing i would change, this line, "how did you hurt me such a lot" anyway 4/5. keep up the good work.

Hi choke i edited the verse. do u think it sounds better now? comment me back plz
Steph<3

Yes, love changing that phrase deffinately helped out your poem a lot. if i could change my vote to 5/5 i would. anyway, keep up the good work. i'm always here if you need my help or if you just want me to read/rate one or more of your poems.