The Altar

First off, I found this poem to be very enjoyable. Correct me if I'm wrong, but the subject matter is love, is it not? If it isn't, I've completely misunderstood the poem and everything written hereafter will be nonsense!

That being said, I found sacrifice to be a particularly powerful and emotive choice of wording. Likewise, the inclusion of 'wanton' within the would-be lovers seemed to supplement your previous choice of words.

It may just be me, but I find it distracting, and unnecessary to capitalize the first letter of each line. I feel that every thought, action, word, emotion, and punctuation should be deliberate and with intent. If a word is capitalized, I want to know why the author decided to do it.

line2. I didn't like 'because' - hmm, it didn't seem to fit with the flow or feel of the rest of the poem, though I have no suggestion as to a replacement without restructuring the next line

line9. felt very weak and obstructed the flow. There's a sense of doubt written into this line that contradicts the tone of the rest of the poem. However, if that was your intent, I'm still not sure I like the simplicity of the expression.

That's my two-cents worth of opinion. A straightforward poem with delightfully dark undertones: Thanks for the enjoyable read