Ah, very nicely done. The first two lines are truly evocative. However, there's a distinct shift in emotions from the beginning to the end. Perhaps it's the word 'linger.' At the beginning the words seem to express an optimistic love, yet in the end the love is forlorn and every line hints at the finality of the feeling: too hot, too beautiful, lost moments... I enjoyed this one thoroughly. Thanks

Ah, very nicely done. The first two lines are truly evocative. However, there's a distinct shift in emotions from the beginning to the end. Perhaps it's the word 'linger.' At the beginning the words seem to express an optimistic love, yet in the end the love is forlorn and every line hints at the finality of the feeling: too hot, too beautiful, lost moments... I enjoyed this one thoroughly. Thanks