Hello :D
Wow, this is a very powerful poem! Your choice of words was extremely good, and I could picture everything that you described. The ending was VERY well writen, and the flow worked. Hmm... Not much else to say, other than keep it up, and 5/5!

With all due respect,
Hatori
The Illusionist

This was not your best work I feel you had two separate ideas and were not able to conbind them completely to flow. That and the Title through you off so bad that It was a wonder why you even made it for the title. The images were good flow was ok but the ideas were to far off the mark to really get any clear message from it. Plot121

All my dreams withered today

*This was my favorite line of the whole poem. It made me very sad. I know that to me my dreams are very special and important and I would hate for them to be taken from me. I felt like you expressed yourself very well here. The flow was a little off in places but that didn't take too much from your words. Overall this was pretty good. Nik*