by Tylor delcourt Jun 17, 2007
category :
Dark, fantasy /
other
His arm stained red |
OK! now THIS i like |
I felt off. like ur didnt put detail, emotion, haunted, lost in his mind. and u had a small miss spelling. "starts" not stars . well rather then that. it was nicly done. just b4 he dies he would say her name and fade away. nicely done 4/5 |
I agree with EndOfTheBeginning anf Nazeer. Pheniminal poem. *wink* |
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