Wow this is great.. and it is like it is talking what is about to happen sort of thing haha cool as take care xoxox

Gr8 write keep it..
4/5 for me
hope to read more soon
bree tk care xx

Intense and sad.

I love this one as well. you are very talented! xxx
Trish

Excellent word choice, the imagery was vivid, and painted clear images in my mind, the emotion was deep and strong, well written, and it kept me attention until the end. another great write, by another great writter, excellent job! 5/5

I really liked it. I gave it a 4/5 though. The only reason for that is because I think it would flow a little better with some punctuation. Aside from that, it's so full of emotion and very deep.

When i first opened i was kind of like "oh crap". try to break it up a little. it was nicely written, but it would be better if it was broken up. keep it up <3

This is not a poem!!! Anyway this one is greatly written and wording is excellent. I like the atmosphere, well done 5/5

Hmmm....interesting...

not really a poem but definately something worth reading..i visualized it all.

amazing write! 5/5

I loved it.
It was so amazing.
5/5 from me.

Devon