Sira! Diba sabi ko sayo titignan natin kung anung kalalabasan and okay lang hindi ko naman sinabing ako ang gumawa eh nilagay ko name mo. ^_^

Ok first up, You have (He), (His), (Him) all capitalized, that's really not needed. Alot of words are capitalized throughout this poem that really don't need to be, I think you should capitalize the first letter of each line to make the poem look a bit neater.

The flow was a little off to me in most places and I think that is because of the lack of punctuation, If you added more then the flow was be a bit better.

Your word choice was good I really did like the words you have chosen to use throughout this poem, Some were really deep.

I wasn't so keen on the structure and that's just because all your stanzas have different amounts of lines throughout it and I prefer them to be all the same that's my own personal opinion.

The meaning you portrayed behind this poem was great though, I truely loved that the most about this piece.

All together I give this poem a 4/5..
~mel

This poem is very unique. It is deep and atmosphere that you created is amazing. Topic is great, very original. You described emotions excellently! 5/5