This poem was very good, maybe one of your best bu,t the last line in the second stanza was a wee bit long. in the last stanza "tone" and "gone" do not rhyme even though they look the same. It still was great, keep it up!

Vodka

Good write. I didnt really feel it though...I simply read it. And the words kept stumbling off my tongue. The idea and word choices were great though. I think the flow could have been better. And like Vodka says, those words dont rhyme.