Comments : Alone..

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "As tears run down my face,
    I'm searching for a trace,
    To find you,
    And the things we use to do."

    "To find you"- doesn't really go well with the rest of the stanza, maybe try something like this: "I'm searching for a trace,
    A way to find you,"

    I think that would be better, but thats my opinion, otherwise everything else was wonderful! :)