I liked the whole poem. It's really sweet and not that sad even though it should be, you found the way so it would be sweet and romantic. My favorite line was

Our bodies, so close, I could feel your heartbeat

A lovely poem. =)

Good job! 5/5

"Bitter coldness was such an attraction;"

`I wondered if the foregoing line denotes a certain trait of someone. (Oh, well, I'll take it as how I interpreted it. Heh.) I actually am in favor with that line, for it made me tie with it my own fancies of aloof chaffs. A real nice line, by the way.

In its technical aspects, I thought certain lines need tightening-up to *further enhance the flow. No big deal, really. 'twas still wonderful on the whole. :]

Best wishes,
Marian