This is a really nice poem and well written

A very cute poem, and touches on some deep emotions. To me, it seems the narrator feels their world might not accept, or will deny the love he/she shares with the other.

I like it, but you could add more, and not compromise the meaning of the poem.

Nicely done. Keep writing!

Aww thats so cute! again, the rhyme was awesome. i loved the lines...

"That the stars won't shine forever
They'll go out before we do
And I'll be in total darkness
Me alone without you"

i really liked this one.

That is so cute, the way you are telling a person he/she can be a star for you in ur darkness, wow...
this was another great one by you dear

His one is very good...direct and succinct

This was really well written, it flowed so well and was utterly adorable, such a beautiful way to express ones love.
keep writing
love Tara-Kay
x

Awww......i dont understand how a 14 year old can write the way you do!!! excellent...5/5!!!

This one I love reading...I love the emotion and the flow that it has...are you sure you're 14?...lol... keep on sharing your talent... and showing you work 5/5 ^_^

It's a sweet, well written piece. I enjoyed it greatly. Keep writing. 5/5

It was really well written, i absolutely loved it, you got talent girl. 5/5 the way you worded the stanza'a were amazing, just one thing on this line

So big and wide and clear

i think it should be

So big, wide and clear

having to and's there just doesn't sound right, it sorta takes out the description, but it was beautifully written, keep up the good work.

That was beutiful! You are very talented!

My heart explodes with love

I loved that line!

It was a very good poem!

;)
Kara

*sniff*
Oh so sad
great job
5/5

A truly wonerful poem . It is filled with a great metallic taste which is rare for even me to find. It's filled with great emtion. Keep it up.;)

This poem is very cute. It made me smile. But even though everything is amazing and your so-in-love.. everything has an end, you put that in here like a silent reminder but then you had a happy ending. I really liked it. Your rhyming was really good. it helped the poem a lot. made it a lot stronger.

this is my favorite part:

That the stars won't shine forever
They'll go out before we do
And I'll be in total darkness
Me alone without you

Excellent

5/5

I love this poem its so sweet and the last to lines in the last stanza made say aww!!!...=)..5/5

This is a very sweet poem. i liked it alot. it was short but to the point. i like poems that r like that 5/5

A nice poem =).

I remember that feeling, from so long ago. Thanks for bringing that back to mind. You do that so well.

Gosh another great poem. this one is really cute too. your poems just flow so great. your rhymes are really good too! 5/5

=] gOoD pOeM !!