Wow, it seemd like I am reading what's in my mind~ the hurt & pain of a lost friendship we share..........

Okay, now this has a flow I can admire. Great meaning, an well written. My only critisim being the word, 'belief,' in that context it should be believe.

Very good otherwise.

~Richi~

Very cute but serious at the same time i like it alot

So very fairytale yet dark and slightly twisted. Do you get what I mean? It has an excellent flow. I like that it doesn't rhyme at all. Very good work. 5/5